In The Past Couple of day we did 2 show don't tell this is one of them. I think I did awesome but I need more punctuation
Friday, 8 August 2014
PURPOSE to describe WALT show not tell in our writing
Last week we did show don't tell with Miss Smith to show our emotion. I think I will need to add sentence
She was frozen like a ornament
her heart was bursting
she was left breathless
she had pins and needles in her hands and feet
from staying so still
huuuuuuuh its coming!
Posted by Maurice at 09:49
Friday, 6 June 2014
You are going to write a descriptive recount, telling our audience about a time you were successful.
Describe a time we were successful
Have you remembered…
- start with something that was said or thought
- Use punctuation (capital letters to start sentences and names and fullstops to end)
- to put everything in the right order
- use describing words and lots of detail.
- Re-read it to check it makes sense
“Today I thought in my head when i walked to the bowl Is the day I'm gonna drop it.
It was Sunday morning, calm wind nice Belize nice and sunny when I went to the park.
When I went to the park there were heaps of people like they were watching Tony Hakes.
There it is big and round when I went up to the bowl, the wind started to get rough I could taste the wind burning my tongue.When I look down I was thinking should I or not, I drop it and it felt so
cool I so heaps of people cheering for me.
Posted by Maurice at 11:00
Friday, 30 May 2014
On Wednesday my class Room 17 had a assembly. Mihi and I did the himine,karakia and mihi. I felt like some one was spying
on me When I did the karakia and himine. after that We did the bongos and some girls made up a dance I think it was cool I was the leader of the bongos. All of the Kaikohe West School cheered for us I felt like, I was a famous person.
Posted by Maurice at 11:01